I'm a girl who dreams of becoming a producer; producer who works at broadcasting center, leader of a program.. Isn't it a great job? When I was a 2nd grader in elementry school, I changed my dream to become a producer. It means I want to be a producer since when I was 9 years old. Then, I thought that I would be a producer of my school, too. I know that job from a book. It was about jobs. I was the class president, that means I like to be a leader.
Because I like to be a leader, I became a vice president of my school. So I was proud of it. After becoming a vice president, I tried to became a producer for my school's broadcasting center. But I was failed. So I was driven to despair. However, it's okay because it taught me that I can fail, too. I think it was a good experience. Now, I should be more endeavor for my dream. At the end of my endeavor, I'
ll becoming a great producer.
Have your own dream. It will make you happy. Of course, I'm happy that I have my own fantastic dream!
Jeong Yeon,
답글삭제Your essay sounds interesting. However, since the activity was meant to describe a person, thing, or event, I wish that you had described your dream or how you started to think about it in a more vivid and descriptive way. May I also suggest using a more diverse range of vocabulary because I think you have great ideas and I would like you to be able to commnicate them better.
I look forward to reading more of your entries. Happy new year and see you in class!